tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8804220152564892710.post5744505817795982225..comments2023-06-26T08:04:29.405-07:00Comments on Originals: travelbttrflyscarhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11528604993293399160noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8804220152564892710.post-69809578974519385112011-08-04T22:34:24.214-07:002011-08-04T22:34:24.214-07:00Well-written prose. Thought-provoking. Loved it ...Well-written prose. Thought-provoking. Loved it and your site.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8804220152564892710.post-82774825637620449032011-08-04T11:58:01.233-07:002011-08-04T11:58:01.233-07:00lovely compliments. thank you!lovely compliments. thank you!bttrflyscarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11528604993293399160noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8804220152564892710.post-80643105031799367332011-08-04T07:30:56.439-07:002011-08-04T07:30:56.439-07:00I really love your poetry the imagery and emotion ...I really love your poetry the imagery and emotion is this, it's really outstandingAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8804220152564892710.post-89836462165382301412011-08-03T20:56:24.005-07:002011-08-03T20:56:24.005-07:00"a raft, and I sank."
"home behind..."a raft, and I sank."<br /><br />"home behind eyelids"<br /><br />Powerful!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8804220152564892710.post-18186639917999659512011-08-03T13:07:05.478-07:002011-08-03T13:07:05.478-07:00thanks Adam!thanks Adam!bttrflyscarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11528604993293399160noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8804220152564892710.post-1772219430562818832011-08-03T07:18:49.105-07:002011-08-03T07:18:49.105-07:00I really enjoyed this poem. I found it very calmin...I really enjoyed this poem. I found it very calming with great imagery.<br /><br />Thanks for sharing :)Adamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14018929620006284859noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8804220152564892710.post-43228261376948365872011-08-02T08:08:17.848-07:002011-08-02T08:08:17.848-07:00:) lol:) lolbttrflyscarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11528604993293399160noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8804220152564892710.post-18071502984618349722011-08-02T07:49:00.936-07:002011-08-02T07:49:00.936-07:00nope.nope.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8804220152564892710.post-35134014061312714342011-08-02T06:56:50.818-07:002011-08-02T06:56:50.818-07:00thanks all! no changes needed? ;)thanks all! no changes needed? ;)bttrflyscarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11528604993293399160noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8804220152564892710.post-12014704373134912212011-08-02T06:05:46.129-07:002011-08-02T06:05:46.129-07:00good to see you here again.good to see you here again.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8804220152564892710.post-30762977058854608592011-08-01T17:05:27.483-07:002011-08-01T17:05:27.483-07:00Very nice. I enjoyed this.Very nice. I enjoyed this.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8804220152564892710.post-67323772476915679172011-08-01T16:30:05.239-07:002011-08-01T16:30:05.239-07:00Lovely, dreamy poem about different types of trave...Lovely, dreamy poem about different types of travels. Very nice!Judith C Evanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09900422363643962837noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8804220152564892710.post-39476762568919802402011-08-01T12:24:05.657-07:002011-08-01T12:24:05.657-07:00interesting take, although that would make it not ...interesting take, although that would make it not a haiku! :)<br /><br />I like the repetition as it was like taking a cue from a song called coast to coast, with a line that goes "coast to coast, coast to coast, to coast" lol.bttrflyscarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11528604993293399160noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8804220152564892710.post-55823769747724075232011-08-01T12:18:49.551-07:002011-08-01T12:18:49.551-07:00Wonderful! One small suggestion ... I'd elimin...Wonderful! One small suggestion ... I'd eliminate the extra "to state to state", so the last stanza simply reads:<br /><br /><i>still in a love dream-<br />state to state<br />home behind eyelids.</i><br /><br />The second line still conveys the double meaning (flying over many "states" and transition between dream / waking "states") without unnecessary repetition. It's your poem (and a fine one, too), so whatever you think is best!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8804220152564892710.post-11866555670208072302011-08-01T10:13:51.597-07:002011-08-01T10:13:51.597-07:00smooth sailings, either a dream trip or a solid va...smooth sailings, either a dream trip or a solid vacation,<br /><br />Thanks for joining poets rally.<br />have fun!Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis Hallhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01546696605935159862noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8804220152564892710.post-9093725143193597942011-08-01T09:53:52.023-07:002011-08-01T09:53:52.023-07:00Beautiful dream... And the feelings expressed even...Beautiful dream... And the feelings expressed even more beautifully! ;)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com