Monday, August 29, 2011

self

nipped at the ankles
which is how I
wander through life
sometimes I must
be pushed through
a door finally opened
after years of
knocking.
can you blame
me for being confused
when I have the sound
of crickets in one ear
and rain in the other?
of course I can curl around
a sunny feeling and collapse
once the blood rushes
from my head.
but these blurry fragile
images are all
I have in times
like these,
I don't need you to
tell me that I can't
lean on the fragile
and that I can't make
sense of the blurry.
darling, you don't know
what it's like
when something
comes up behind you
nipping like
a hungry reminder.

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15 comments:

  1. GoldberryAugust 29, 2011 at 9:59 AM

    i identified with the last lines. those reminders don't always just nip, though... sometimes they bite with crocodile jaws.

    i liked the way you did your line-breaks, fragmented but complete, like a jigsaw puzzle.

    good work!

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  2. UnknownAugust 29, 2011 at 3:00 PM

    Ah... but I'll bet you could succeed at leaning on the fragile and deciphering the blurry. I'll bet you can do whatever you put that clever mind to doing!

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  3. AnonymousAugust 30, 2011 at 7:25 AM

    'curl around a sunny feeling'...some marvellous turns of phrase here. :) // Peter.

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  4. AnonymousAugust 30, 2011 at 8:57 AM

    Some beautiful word plays and phrases. Imagery of leaning on the fragile with sound of crickets in your ears is delicate balance. Wonderful work

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  5. Buddah MoskowitzAugust 30, 2011 at 9:00 AM

    I really liked the crickets in one ear and rain in the other imagery.

    Blurry and fragile: excellent description as they ensure unintentional destruction, which is always nipping my my ankles.

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  6. AnonymousAugust 30, 2011 at 10:15 AM

    Thought provoking and beautiful. Loved it!

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  7. Cassiopeia RisesAugust 30, 2011 at 12:45 PM

    Very interesting and well written poem. Loved it.

    Melanie

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  8. AnonymousAugust 30, 2011 at 2:40 PM

    Nothing blurry or fragile here. This is a poem that can stand on its own.

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  9. AnonymousAugust 31, 2011 at 12:12 AM

    Your imagery and word play are magnificent. You write with such elegance

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  10. AnonymousAugust 31, 2011 at 10:53 PM

    I also loved the curling around a sunny feeling, but I think the clincher for me was the rain in one ear and the crickets in the other... I know that feeling very well. As always a really lovely and strong poem!

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  11. AnonymousSeptember 1, 2011 at 5:04 PM

    We need occastional nips to wake us up.
    Well done with penning out those thoughts:)

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  12. MCSeptember 1, 2011 at 5:37 PM

    "when I have the sound
    of crickets in one ear
    and rain in the other?" Love that line. Anyways this poem has such soft and delicate yet colorful words. Thank you for sharing.

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  13. UnknownSeptember 2, 2011 at 3:40 PM

    this is exactly how i feel right now...you've done it again Amy. xo

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  14. Jingle Poetry At Olive GardenSeptember 6, 2011 at 7:06 PM

    amazing..


    Poetry Picnic Week 3 is open for submission until Thursday, 1 to 3 random poems are welcome…

    Welcome in, free and fun…


    Glad to discover your poetry talent, hope to see you share.
    Bless your Tuesday.
    xoxox

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  15. Jingle Poetry At Olive GardenNovember 29, 2011 at 8:31 AM

    How are you today?

    Happy end of November!

    Appreciated your support to our poetry picnic,

    Hope to see you share today,

    A random poem or old poem will do the wonders too.

    Your talent rocks.

    Hope to see you in.

    xoxox

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