Thursday, May 26, 2011

small stone #3

Out the window,

I thought I saw Emily

pale, gawking.



a green T-shirt.



bouncing firey springs on her head.

18 comments:

  1. Nice use of spacing and short lines. I found myself looking out my window as I read this. The final image is wonderful. Thanks for sharing

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  2. Succinct and sweetly satisfying....!

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  3. Ahh -- love the simplicity. I've never been able to master the art of few words but you have done it brilliantly.

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  4. Short fun poem, simple enough to digest yet I'm able to think about it for a long time. (:

    - RPIMotion Author

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  5. I can picture the scene. This is short and simple, but it works!

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  6. Nice image you've created with this one.

    Congrats on receiving your most recent award!

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  7. Loved this image, there is a good use of spacing. The image in my head was of my children standing absently absorbed in their own thing, it would be nice to be that way so unabashed.
    Nice post.

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  8. This is really cool...so light and delightful, :)

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