Monday, June 13, 2011

thoughtful hillbillies


RICK:
Hey Rick?

DICK:
Yea, Dick?

RICK:
See that sky roll on by? (points)

DICK:
...Oh, my...

RICK:
Don't i-t'almost makes yer wanner... cry?

DICK:
(Sighs) Yea, er die...

RICK:
I mean, don’t-it makes yer wanner ask… why?

DICK:
Don't think(thoughtful)- Nope. Can’t say I’d-wanner even try…

(both take a deep breath in)
(RICK exhales but DICK starts hacking and coughing)
(RICK slaps him on the back)

RICK:
Dick! Wha-happened?! Yer almost choked, why?

DICK:
Oh, Rick (coughs)... I think I swallerd-a fly!
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35 comments:

  1. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallJune 13, 2011 at 12:03 PM

    very playful,
    what a fun treat.

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  2. AnonymousJune 13, 2011 at 12:57 PM

    Intriguing dialogue internal turmoil, storms of spirit

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  3. AnonymousJune 15, 2011 at 8:05 AM

    Living among the southern Appalachian hill people, I so get this. Great title too. Oh, and your profile photo here is beautiful. Love that wisp of a smile!!

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  4. bttrflyscarJune 15, 2011 at 8:33 AM

    :D

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  5. AnonymousJune 15, 2011 at 10:09 AM

    Hehhehe.. I found it funny! Nice!
    I am ~
    http://puplumages.wordpress.com/2011/06/03/i-me-the-butterfly/

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  6. mindsingerJune 15, 2011 at 10:23 AM

    I did like yours! Fun.

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  7. AlcinaJune 15, 2011 at 10:33 AM

    Never read something like this..
    Nice work :)

    Alcina

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  8. PaulJune 15, 2011 at 11:12 AM

    Good poem, made me smile

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  9. AnonymousJune 15, 2011 at 11:13 AM

    clever rhyme, >.> ever consider screen plays?

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  10. bttrflyscarJune 15, 2011 at 11:30 AM

    actually yes. right now I'm a bit of a playwright.

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  11. AnonymousJune 15, 2011 at 11:43 AM

    I was looking for the serious side and then you made me laugh.
    It is good to laugh.
    I enjoyed reading this.
    Genebrother

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  12. MaggieJune 15, 2011 at 11:59 AM

    LOL. My kind of write. : )

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  13. bttrflyscarJune 15, 2011 at 12:20 PM

    thanks, all!

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  14. The PoetJune 15, 2011 at 12:39 PM

    Very nicely done!

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  15. K McGeeJune 15, 2011 at 6:06 PM

    LOL - What a fun, play-filled poem. Love the end!

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  16. AnonymousJune 16, 2011 at 2:27 AM

    Haha love it made me smile :)

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  17. bttrflyscarJune 16, 2011 at 6:33 AM

    :) great!

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  18. UnknownJune 16, 2011 at 10:14 AM

    well done. Love the script format. Really enjoyed the mixing of voice and humor at the end. Excellent:)

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  19. AnonymousJune 17, 2011 at 2:48 AM

    *coughs - not from swallowing a fly - from laughing* Well painted picture!

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  20. MaDesaJune 17, 2011 at 3:59 AM

    Too funny! Great work!

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  21. AnonymousJune 17, 2011 at 6:19 AM

    Hahaha! That was an entertaining read. Nice!

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  22. andymac89June 17, 2011 at 8:27 AM

    I like the idea of dialogue in the form of poetry. A very clever idea executed to perfection.

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  23. UnknownJune 17, 2011 at 10:55 AM

    LOL! Nice bit of amusement!
    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/06/14/letting-go

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  24. Liz Rice-SosneJune 17, 2011 at 11:55 AM

    Loved it!

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  25. AnonymousJune 17, 2011 at 11:42 PM

    this is awesome Amy! and gorgeous blog layout, too. You go, go :)

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  26. AnonymousJune 18, 2011 at 6:02 AM

    harhar! creatively funny :)

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  27. AnonymousJune 18, 2011 at 7:57 PM

    too funny. having spent lots of time in Tennessee, this is all too real. hee hee.

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  28. Someone is SpecialJune 19, 2011 at 4:20 AM

    perfect.. and playful originals..

    Someone is Special

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  29. Jack Edwards PoetryJune 19, 2011 at 7:36 AM

    Fun poem with great rhyme and dialogue.

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  30. Mr. WalkerJune 19, 2011 at 7:51 AM

    Clever and fun, playing with a script as a poem. An enjoyable read. Thanks.

    Richard

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  31. AnonymousJune 21, 2011 at 8:07 AM

    lovely...

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  32. bttrflyscarJune 21, 2011 at 11:47 AM

    lol...is it?

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  33. UnknownJune 23, 2011 at 4:56 AM

    I loved listening in to this conversation, the flow was great and the feel perfectly playful. Much enjoyed ~ Rose

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  34. Vinay Leo R.June 24, 2011 at 8:14 AM

    haha :D what a beautiful rhyme and flow! conversational poetry. admirable!

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  35. wytchcroftJuly 28, 2011 at 1:55 PM

    hello! thought i'd pop by with some biscuits, a thermos and a game of Cluedo while we sit outside LJ. Grrr!

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