Monday, June 13, 2011

thoughtful hillbillies


RICK:
Hey Rick?

DICK:
Yea, Dick?

RICK:
See that sky roll on by? (points)

DICK:
...Oh, my...

RICK:
Don't i-t'almost makes yer wanner... cry?

DICK:
(Sighs) Yea, er die...

RICK:
I mean, don’t-it makes yer wanner ask… why?

DICK:
Don't think(thoughtful)- Nope. Can’t say I’d-wanner even try…

(both take a deep breath in)
(RICK exhales but DICK starts hacking and coughing)
(RICK slaps him on the back)

RICK:
Dick! Wha-happened?! Yer almost choked, why?

DICK:
Oh, Rick (coughs)... I think I swallerd-a fly!
Posted by at
Labels: , , , ,

35 comments:

  1. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallJune 13, 2011 at 12:03 PM

    very playful,
    what a fun treat.

    ReplyDelete
  2. AnonymousJune 13, 2011 at 12:57 PM

    Intriguing dialogue internal turmoil, storms of spirit

    ReplyDelete
  3. AnonymousJune 15, 2011 at 8:05 AM

    Living among the southern Appalachian hill people, I so get this. Great title too. Oh, and your profile photo here is beautiful. Love that wisp of a smile!!

    ReplyDelete
  4. bttrflyscarJune 15, 2011 at 8:33 AM

    :D

    ReplyDelete
  5. AnonymousJune 15, 2011 at 10:09 AM

    Hehhehe.. I found it funny! Nice!
    I am ~
    http://puplumages.wordpress.com/2011/06/03/i-me-the-butterfly/

    ReplyDelete
  6. mindsingerJune 15, 2011 at 10:23 AM

    I did like yours! Fun.

    ReplyDelete
  7. AlcinaJune 15, 2011 at 10:33 AM

    Never read something like this..
    Nice work :)

    Alcina

    ReplyDelete
  8. PaulJune 15, 2011 at 11:12 AM

    Good poem, made me smile

    ReplyDelete
  9. AnonymousJune 15, 2011 at 11:13 AM

    clever rhyme, >.> ever consider screen plays?

    ReplyDelete
  10. bttrflyscarJune 15, 2011 at 11:30 AM

    actually yes. right now I'm a bit of a playwright.

    ReplyDelete
  11. AnonymousJune 15, 2011 at 11:43 AM

    I was looking for the serious side and then you made me laugh.
    It is good to laugh.
    I enjoyed reading this.
    Genebrother

    ReplyDelete
  12. MaggieJune 15, 2011 at 11:59 AM

    LOL. My kind of write. : )

    ReplyDelete
  13. bttrflyscarJune 15, 2011 at 12:20 PM

    thanks, all!

    ReplyDelete
  14. The PoetJune 15, 2011 at 12:39 PM

    Very nicely done!

    ReplyDelete
  15. K McGeeJune 15, 2011 at 6:06 PM

    LOL - What a fun, play-filled poem. Love the end!

    ReplyDelete
  16. AnonymousJune 16, 2011 at 2:27 AM

    Haha love it made me smile :)

    ReplyDelete
  17. bttrflyscarJune 16, 2011 at 6:33 AM

    :) great!

    ReplyDelete
  18. UnknownJune 16, 2011 at 10:14 AM

    well done. Love the script format. Really enjoyed the mixing of voice and humor at the end. Excellent:)

    ReplyDelete
  19. AnonymousJune 17, 2011 at 2:48 AM

    *coughs - not from swallowing a fly - from laughing* Well painted picture!

    ReplyDelete
  20. MaDesaJune 17, 2011 at 3:59 AM

    Too funny! Great work!

    ReplyDelete
  21. AnonymousJune 17, 2011 at 6:19 AM

    Hahaha! That was an entertaining read. Nice!

    ReplyDelete
  22. andymac89June 17, 2011 at 8:27 AM

    I like the idea of dialogue in the form of poetry. A very clever idea executed to perfection.

    ReplyDelete
  23. UnknownJune 17, 2011 at 10:55 AM

    LOL! Nice bit of amusement!
    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/06/14/letting-go

    ReplyDelete
  24. Liz Rice-SosneJune 17, 2011 at 11:55 AM

    Loved it!

    ReplyDelete
  25. AnonymousJune 17, 2011 at 11:42 PM

    this is awesome Amy! and gorgeous blog layout, too. You go, go :)

    ReplyDelete
  26. AnonymousJune 18, 2011 at 6:02 AM

    harhar! creatively funny :)

    ReplyDelete
  27. AnonymousJune 18, 2011 at 7:57 PM

    too funny. having spent lots of time in Tennessee, this is all too real. hee hee.

    ReplyDelete
  28. Someone is SpecialJune 19, 2011 at 4:20 AM

    perfect.. and playful originals..

    Someone is Special

    ReplyDelete
  29. Jack Edwards PoetryJune 19, 2011 at 7:36 AM

    Fun poem with great rhyme and dialogue.

    ReplyDelete
  30. Mr. WalkerJune 19, 2011 at 7:51 AM

    Clever and fun, playing with a script as a poem. An enjoyable read. Thanks.

    Richard

    ReplyDelete
  31. AnonymousJune 21, 2011 at 8:07 AM

    lovely...

    ReplyDelete
  32. bttrflyscarJune 21, 2011 at 11:47 AM

    lol...is it?

    ReplyDelete
  33. UnknownJune 23, 2011 at 4:56 AM

    I loved listening in to this conversation, the flow was great and the feel perfectly playful. Much enjoyed ~ Rose

    ReplyDelete
  34. Vinay Leo R.June 24, 2011 at 8:14 AM

    haha :D what a beautiful rhyme and flow! conversational poetry. admirable!

    ReplyDelete
  35. wytchcroftJuly 28, 2011 at 1:55 PM

    hello! thought i'd pop by with some biscuits, a thermos and a game of Cluedo while we sit outside LJ. Grrr!

    ReplyDelete

Subscribe to: Post Comments (Atom)

Reach for the clouds. . .

Tickle your toes. . .

  • in tact
    sex object. not afraid of the words. I've used many objects for the sake of sex. in fact my body has been pretty disposable- I don't...
  • John Wayne
    two squinting painted eyes looking solemn on a leathery face. this knight of the golden age has a 20 gallon bucket of a hat atop his slicked...
  • Memoir of a Memoir: Week 7
    Ah, 7. The number in question. During this process of developing my first full-length work of prose, and a memoir to boot, I have considered...
  • Hi Faithful Readers
    This is just a short note from me to inform you that after my extensive monthly study and subsequent written exploration of Psalms and Prove...
  • in dreams
    In my dreams I am the fictional version of myself. The one I seek to be in my short-stories and prose. The one who gets her point across but...
  • small stones
    July 7th the face of a rose deflates our windowsill- not much of a garden. July 8th after the party- a painting is crooked I think someone d...
  • rain
    Rain, dearest friend. You know just when to pound on my head. I know there is more to this world, than what I have given from inside myself....
  • Invention of Play
    The ache in my jaw reminds me of my age, that I'm still cutting teeth on broken sage and giving up meat is my best bet, because I'm ...
  • flirty
    lean in a little. say it like it's a secret. make your breath sound like italics. click your tongue against the roof your mouth then you...
  • (no title)
    Cal, For Elizabeth Bishop You are American gossip, Didn't anyone have the heart to tell you? You said yourself, you are fantastic and u...

Poets United Contributor