RICK:
Hey Rick?
DICK:
Yea, Dick?
RICK:
See that sky roll on by? (points)
DICK:
...Oh, my...
RICK:
Don't i-t'almost makes yer wanner... cry?
DICK:
(Sighs) Yea, er die...
RICK:
I mean, don’t-it makes yer wanner ask… why?
DICK:
Don't think(thoughtful)- Nope. Can’t say I’d-wanner even try…
(both take a deep breath in)
(RICK exhales but DICK starts hacking and coughing)
(RICK slaps him on the back)
RICK:
Dick! Wha-happened?! Yer almost choked, why?
DICK:
Oh, Rick (coughs)... I think I swallerd-a fly!
Hey Rick?
DICK:
Yea, Dick?
RICK:
See that sky roll on by? (points)
DICK:
...Oh, my...
RICK:
Don't i-t'almost makes yer wanner... cry?
DICK:
(Sighs) Yea, er die...
RICK:
I mean, don’t-it makes yer wanner ask… why?
DICK:
Don't think(thoughtful)- Nope. Can’t say I’d-wanner even try…
(both take a deep breath in)
(RICK exhales but DICK starts hacking and coughing)
(RICK slaps him on the back)
RICK:
Dick! Wha-happened?! Yer almost choked, why?
DICK:
Oh, Rick (coughs)... I think I swallerd-a fly!
very playful,
ReplyDeletewhat a fun treat.
Intriguing dialogue internal turmoil, storms of spirit
ReplyDeleteLiving among the southern Appalachian hill people, I so get this. Great title too. Oh, and your profile photo here is beautiful. Love that wisp of a smile!!
ReplyDelete:D
ReplyDeleteHehhehe.. I found it funny! Nice!
ReplyDeleteI am ~
http://puplumages.wordpress.com/2011/06/03/i-me-the-butterfly/
I did like yours! Fun.
ReplyDeleteNever read something like this..
ReplyDeleteNice work :)
Alcina
Good poem, made me smile
ReplyDeleteclever rhyme, >.> ever consider screen plays?
ReplyDeleteactually yes. right now I'm a bit of a playwright.
ReplyDeleteI was looking for the serious side and then you made me laugh.
ReplyDeleteIt is good to laugh.
I enjoyed reading this.
Genebrother
LOL. My kind of write. : )
ReplyDeletethanks, all!
ReplyDeleteVery nicely done!
ReplyDeleteLOL - What a fun, play-filled poem. Love the end!
ReplyDeleteHaha love it made me smile :)
ReplyDelete:) great!
ReplyDeletewell done. Love the script format. Really enjoyed the mixing of voice and humor at the end. Excellent:)
ReplyDelete*coughs - not from swallowing a fly - from laughing* Well painted picture!
ReplyDeleteToo funny! Great work!
ReplyDeleteHahaha! That was an entertaining read. Nice!
ReplyDeleteI like the idea of dialogue in the form of poetry. A very clever idea executed to perfection.
ReplyDeleteLOL! Nice bit of amusement!
ReplyDeletehttp://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/06/14/letting-go
Loved it!
ReplyDeletethis is awesome Amy! and gorgeous blog layout, too. You go, go :)
ReplyDeleteharhar! creatively funny :)
ReplyDeletetoo funny. having spent lots of time in Tennessee, this is all too real. hee hee.
ReplyDeleteperfect.. and playful originals..
ReplyDeleteSomeone is Special
Fun poem with great rhyme and dialogue.
ReplyDeleteClever and fun, playing with a script as a poem. An enjoyable read. Thanks.
ReplyDeleteRichard
lovely...
ReplyDeletelol...is it?
ReplyDeleteI loved listening in to this conversation, the flow was great and the feel perfectly playful. Much enjoyed ~ Rose
ReplyDeletehaha :D what a beautiful rhyme and flow! conversational poetry. admirable!
ReplyDeletehello! thought i'd pop by with some biscuits, a thermos and a game of Cluedo while we sit outside LJ. Grrr!
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