Tuesday, June 28, 2011

cryk

there ain't no other place like you to roam.

where I dug in my heels and said "No, I won't come home!"

Dancing in the warbling "cryk" out back-

way out back behind the shanty shack-

and in that shadow grove they danced with me,

the muses -I counted three.

First buzzed revenge, a stinger she left in my side
and then windy rebellion my blue ears she did chide


and then fluttering slowly growth she finally came
and asserted that all three are one in the same.

31 comments:

  1. I really like this one. So vivid. I'm going to return here often.

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  2. This has such an etheral feeling - really beautiful. :)

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  3. Casually bril as usual. Loved it - loved it loved it!

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  4. cryk..cryk...
    very unique poem! a new style of writing for me,, :)
    thanks for sharing am :)
    sincerely, Citra

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  5. love the ending, a perfect build up.
    lovely entry.

    Happy Rally.

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  6. Wonderful. I could see the cryk and a little girl frollicking in the water. Nice!

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  7. A romp and a wander... and those muses? All three the same? I guess that is true!

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  8. Whimsical imagery, loved the symbolism of 'threes' and the evolving development of this piece. Lovely write ~ Rose

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  9. a very accomplished poem, impeccably written

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  11. Sweet. May they all stay with you!

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  12. those tricky Muses - beautiful poem

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  13. Windy rebellion? Smacks of tummy rumbling! LOL :)

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  14. I enjoyed the 'rhyme' in this. :-)

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  15. Bluebell! You've closed your collection already!

    Thanks everyone!

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  16. This was lovely; I loved how you tied the 3 muses together! I loved the way it flowed~ I loved the ending, "and then fluttering slowly growth she finally came
    and asserted that all three are one in the same"
    Well Done~

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  17. yikes! I really enjoyed reading that! Thanks for thoughts.

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  18. this is so chill and yet so genious...

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  19. I know those three, know them well, you've captured them for sure!

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  20. Feelings we've all had. really emotional, love it!

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  21. Revenge, rebellion and growth - I love it! I love the flow of "way out back behind the shanty shack". Nice read!

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  22. I love your style because there is none to compare it too, its in a league all its own. Beautifully done =)

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  23. ^what a great comment. thank you. :)

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  24. all lovely comments, much appreciated!!

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  25. This is alive and beautiful, Thank you, much appreciated, WS

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